This week in literacy we were writing about the Hawswell Quarry trip last week. First we got given our groups I was with Erin's dad it was bad but then I liked it because all of the girls screamed so loud that I was like BE QUIET. Then the were like OK and I said again BE QUIET. so I hope you like my story peace out.
I am a student at South Hornby Primary. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Friday, April 12, 2019
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Hi Aone, Miss Goslin here, thanks for posting your Halswell Quarry story. I like how you started and ended your story with your thoughts about the day. Next time you could add some dialogue. What were the kids saying?
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Miss Goslin
Thank you Mrs Goslin for the beautiful comment you gave me. most of the kids were yelling out it is to hot to be walking around this whole thing it is to big. thank you for saying what i have to work on next time it gave me some thought. Did you have fun at the Hawswell Quarry?
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to hearing back from you.